Grate poem it rilly tuches my heart

What a pain to bear! 5/5

Very sad ending, but over all, it was a amazing poem. You have a great way to make rhyming seem so natural and unforced, I really like that about you're style. Great job of expressing such a dire topic in today's society. Kudos!

This poem is so beautiful!!!!! I loved this... my families in the military, Dad just got back from Diego Gracia.. an island off of Iraq.. I loved the emotion you put into it.... I LOVED your rhyming it never was forced. I think the only thing you can do is on this:

Then one month they stopped
Many more passed by
Then I received the news
That caused me to scream and cry

Instead of 'that caused me to scream and cry' try 'That caused me to cry' Just flows better..

But other than that darlin' it was perfect. Very Beautiful! This was my favorite part:

Every day was agony
Never seeming to get better
The only comfort I had was
Holding on to your lette

I can relate to this part...

Beautiful Write!

5/5

Wonderful poem. Its very sad. The flow was excellent and a lot of emotion was put into it.
Good job 5/5

:Sarah:

That was just amazing. The emotion you packed into that just leaves me speachless. The rhythm was perfect, and your rhymes were great. Most of all I love what you had to say. My favorite line was "The only comfort I had was
Holding on to your letter"
That just had me thinking. I look forward to reading more of your work.

This is a very heartfelt poem, very sad, very well written. Great job, keep up the good work!

Very moving. Excellent write, an even better read. So sad is the story inside the poem 5/5

This piece was really really good, it looked like it was written straight from the heart. I loved every stanza and every word.
This is a superbly written poem and it deserves nothing but praise.

Well done

10/5

Gary.

Sad, yet very amazing. I loved it 5/5

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