5/5!! really powerful word's!! <3 this poem!

That was a good poem i like it alot...it explains so much in some ppls lives...
Samantha

This was such a powerful poem. The implications of the words are amazing and the flow is impeccable. Great write.

This is am ore sinsere poem of your but agina oyu pulled it off i like the way you can imagine your there watching trying to stop her..

xxx alex xxx

I could imagine myself in front of that girl, this poem is so powerful and deep. 5/5

I liked this. The entire poem has a really dark feel to it. It really makes the reader want to read it and sends shivers down there spine at the same time. I liked your rhyming couplets used, they didnt seemed forced and poem had a steady flow to it. I can kinda relate to this poem. I can understand what your saying with this voice in your head. i liekd the alliteration you use with "stained sheets" this creates this really grusem imagery. To improve this peace of work, i would suggest you split it up into stanza's. I mean it'll make the work seem less clutered i guess. I also suggest yopu use a more varied punctuation. But i did quoite enjoy it. Keep it up! xx

Good one, very interesting and also unique. Well written. I liked the topic and i enjoyed in the atmosphere of the poem. 5/5

Wow, this piece was nicely penned, it was sad and deep, my fave lines=
"Do this, do that, cut you're wrist with that blade,
Let the blood pour, and the world will fade.
it was amazing 5/5

Extremely Touching..You're on my favourite poets list!<33