Thats awesome. I love the rhythm with an up-down flow.

{5/5}

[PygmyPuff]

This poem was great except on this line:

"For in my eyes, there are many more years to come."

I think you should take off the words "to come" so it'd be like "For in my eyes, there are many more years" I dont know thats just my opinion. But overall its a great poem.

Wow.. wonderfully written, the flow and words were awesome. The message behind it so powerful! Great write, better read. 5/5 but it deserves more.

Much Love,
.:Danielle:.

Great poem. The flow was good and I loved the way you structured it.
Keep it up 5/5

:Sarah:

Another masterpiece from you. I'm sure this'll be interpreted many different ways, but the way I'm seeing it, I'd love to recite this to my baby sister. Brilliant.

I really enjoyed reading this. It was quite unique, i've never read anything like this, which is excellent in itself. There is so much truth in these words. I love the first little stanza. The flow was really good and the word choice was suited well. Another great poem you have here. 5/5

Tammie

Oooooh! this poem was really sweet and true! i haven't really read onelike this before, tammie's right, its unique!
keep it up!
nuff luv x

Good job on your poems i like them