Hey,
First of all thank you for your comment - much appreciated. Anywyas now your poem. I really liked the vocabulary youve used throughout it. Your discription creates vivid imagery which is just excellent! I was ingaged form the first ;line becuase of your description. I like how oyuve described heartbreak in the last stanza. I like the overall flow of the poem and i liked the message in it... To improve i suggest more punctuation but other then that a great read! Keep at it! xx

Hm. I usually don't like Arostics.
Anyways.

This was very good. I liked how you broke up the stanzas in that weird way. It really worked for this poem. The meaning was a bit cliche, but eh, we all have our depressing days. Nonetheless, very nice. Your best so far.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex 5.5

Hey thats the poem you wrote for the contest, and i gave it 4th place, though in deserved more, your choice of words were awesome! congrats!
nuff luv xx

One minor thing: unspontaneous? is that a word?

Anyways, I really like this certain poetic style, it's excellent. You did a great job and used wonderful vocabulary and the meaning behind this poem is excellent as well. 5/5