This is amazing. Very nicely written. I thought the flow was well and it went along easy to read and everything.

I loved it. The flow was excellent and the emotion was shown. I like the last stanza the best.
Keep it up 5/5

:Sarah:

I liked the first four stanzas the best. Very enjoyable and heartfelt. The last few stanzas felt a little choppier to me, i just didn't feel like it flowed as nicely (not that it was bad). I'm not an expert though so take my opinion for what its worth.
Ps. If you wanted the first four stanzas could be a stand alone poem and then have the others as a sequel. It helps break up poems that have a different flow part way through or that are very long but still have them connected to each other.

Moments in life,
That made time stand still,
Are the heartbeats we want to remember,
But probably never will.
^^^
Not true.

I really, really liked this ... to a point.
You had such a good beginning, and you ruined it at the end with the suicide-type thing. Eh.

Nicely written, though.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex 5.5

Very nice. I will read more of your stuff.

Wow, very beautifully penned poem, you have a great rhyme and flow........
very thoughtful
keep up the great work cause you are so talented.

Very lovely poem hun :D
it captured my attention from the very beginning and i give it my complete adoration :D
5/5 love.

Ooh thats a great poem, i gave you 3rd place that congrats! it was excellent and enjoyable to read! it met my idea of the title too.
nuff luv xx

It flows well and is very poignant. I do feel like it would be better as two separate poems, though.