Comments : Forever And More

  • 13 years ago

    by tyanna

    Hummmm..Well the flow was a little off...Maybe if you just rearranged it into a rhyme scheme...Maybe rearrange some of the words too..I don't have any suggestions as to how you could do this though..sorry..Great starter piece though!! I think you could turn this into a great write with a little fixing...Best of luck!! 4/5
    Tyanna

  • 13 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    Well there's some... but still great! most important for me u write it from the bottom of ur heart i really appreciate and i thankful that u shared ur poems w/us... just keep on writing ok!

  • 13 years ago

    by Beauty In The Breaking

    Hehehe Ok, since you already admitted it I won't say anything lol All in all I loved it and hope that you two stay close friends for life =) Another 5 =)
    Rhea

  • 13 years ago

    by Corruption

    I thought it was good
    through yeah the flow was perfect
    it was still interesting to read
    i liked it
    thx for the comments
    and yeah the rest is coming
    after i get a few more comments lol

    Keenan