I had tingles up my spine in the first stanza. well done. also the rest was so creepy. maybe should be a dark poem. but the ending really was fantasic. made it awesome. was just good but the ending had the right words and phases.

5/5 David

Very nice. Absolutely beautiful. Again, a little trouble with rhyming, but that can be easily fixed. Good work. Keep it up!

Dark , definitely . I got chills reading this . There was some trouble with the flow, bit of rhyming, but it was good . Really .
..__MiNDYY

We bathe in the icy waters,
faces unseen and unknown.
You can tell we're the cursed spirits,
truly, forever alone.

Beautiful! Well done Gabriella! It's nice for you to write something that is not so dark as usual. Gives your writing more depth - not that you needed it!

Honeypot x

Very, very good use of metaphor in this piece. You have talent; this is evident in the original subjects and descriptions/metaphors that you use.
You've really impressed me with this one. So much so, I'm not sure what to say...
Congratulations on a wonderful write.

Hehe, I love this poem Gab!! The way you use your words in it is so nice.. it really makes people think about things. Nice job girl!! 5/5 <3 <3

~Loveless Nights~

Intresting read. I really loved the description you have used in this, and the dark subject keeps the reader wanting to read more. The overall peom sends shivers running down teh readers back. The rhyming of the poem was good, as well as the overall pace of the poem. Youve kinda got this kindof metaphor in this work havnt you? I really enjoyed that... especially in the secound stanza. The entire poem seemed really strong, i liked your structure, and it has a good flow. Thank you for your comments and yeah i did enjoy reading your poems! :) Keep them up! xx

I love this poem! beautiful! well penned!

Wow this was very beautiful.. and ominus(sp?) it kind of remined me of like a witches chant in the horror movies. Amazing. I love it. The last verse was definatly my favorite because it wrapped up the poem yet that single verse was so powerful that it could stand on its own if need be. Amazing word choices. I loved everything about this one. it was truely fantastic.

I love the way you ask a quesiton to start then answer it and describe it well.

xxx alex xxx

Wow, last stanza is so powerful and you expressed your self excellently, rhythm of this poem is also superb, I like the imagery. You have one mistake, you used word-waters- twice in first stanza which leaves bad impression. Anyway greatly written piece.