OMG!! Jenna, babe... I cried.. I cried like a baby! I'm going to the military ball with a JROTC guy and this reminded me of my old neighbor who was in the army... Amazing babe just amazing... I loved her monologue ((sp?)) and the story behind it... Great job hun!!

.hearycha.
Ciao~

This poem is very well written, it brought tears to my eyes. I like everything you write. keep up the good work.

Aww this is so beautiful... I love the story behind it, and the "Him standing there watching her in his army green." line at the end tied it all together. Wonderful work. 5/5

Very nice description in this one. It seemed like every noun was complimented with an adjective. The dialogue in this one seemed very Shakespearian because of the rhyme scheme. A very beautiful poem, it really reminds me of something from a war movie, where the widower would wait at home, hoping her husband will come back from the war. She doesn't know he died, but when she finds out her heartbreaks, but in the end of the movie, she remembers him, and she is happy again.

Beautiful poem.

Wow this is really good. very long, but i really enjoyed reading it. you did a great job on it. keep writing. 5/5

~Kristina

Wow this poem is awesome I dont know what u would have been conserned about. this made me want to cry.

Can i start by saying i thought this poem was one of the best ever, the flow, the vocab, the imagery, it all contributed to an amazing poem. i loved the techniques within it and my fav lines were:

picking up shards of the golden stars in distress,
She put together a perfect little wedding dress.

there was something about these that seemed so beautiful and sad and hopeless. it was just truly a beautiful poem.
the ending showed a resolve which is always good :D. the only thing i wasn't fond on was the use of the word "porcelain" dunno why but this site has killed that word for me, sorry! otherwise amazing in every sense

O my lord that was beautiful. so touching and just WOW luv ur work

This was okay, not that great.

This poem made me cry. Just knowing that people are really going through this, especially little girls like that.. It breaks my heart.
This was a beautiful poem, and it was just about perfect. I actually liked how you seperated the stanzas with different amounts of lines, it worked out quite well.

Wonderful Job. :D
5/5