Ooo, one of my faves by you!
The rhythm was so excellent. It sounded like it could almost be sung.
The imagery was amazing, i felt like i was stood right there as the words were recited..
I love it!
(And yeah, written to kill my writers block.. and it worked for a while, got a couple of new ones now =)
I liked this one as well : ) It put me in mind of the poetry of the Romantics, if you're familiar, with the exclamations and softness.
There was a very nice, subtle rhyme moving thoughout the whole thing, and I think it worked very well. The only rhyming phrase I didn't particularly like was "it deepens some feet." I know you were looking for a match for "beat," but... "some feet" is kind of bland. But, hey, it's not as though it made the poem bad, I just think you have the talent to do something more with it.
Again, I'll restate that I loved the rhythm and the movement of the words - I can tell you chose them well. I also liked the occasional questioning nature of the poem. Good work, again!
Wow.. this is really great.. i love the metaphors and the flow is really nice as well.. a different style than your other poems and it shows me that you can write wonderfully in all different types of poetry.. this is by far my favorite of them all... the passion i feel is really strong in this poem.. keep it up :D
I loved the title. it was inviting and amazingly open. the poem itself was great, some parts need to be worked on but you will fix them in the future. your talent is evident and your skill is present. well done and don't stop. keep writing from your heart.
12 years ago
I loved it, your wording was perfect. i gave you 5/5. it was awesome, i did add you to my fave's so i hope you dont mind. but the poem was excelent, the rythem was great the flow was great. there is not one thing i can say in a bad way about the poem. well great job.
As always i love your poems as you really know how to touch your readers heart...
in this one, once again you did a great job with the metopher and the word choice, that made this poem one of the greatest poem,
i really enjoy reading all of your poems and it is because you are truly a great poet that is why your poems are so great .
dear, im really one of your biggest fan who love all of your words. keep it up like always.
a 5/5 from me as you really deserve it.