Excellent poem, this should probably a sad poem, but it was still good, nice lines and nice flow. Keep it up.

I liked that alot. it told a story that i couldnt stop reading. it flowed well, cept the usual minr errors we both have. and i like the concept of them assuming no one cared, and then finding out how wrong they are. very good.
love ya lots,
~sore

Excellent!

Same as your old ones..its all about death and suffering!

keep it up!

This is going to be one of my faves i love it great job