Tis an interesting poem, what movie was it that inspired you because i think i have seen it i just can't put a name with it. 5/5 though, good write!

Its very true this kind of situation. I heard a childs voice in this poem, i liked it 4/5 . Keep writing.

This poem was pretty good, id prolly react the same way for enough is enough and theres no reason to beat up on ur kids thats not acceptable, u wrote it well great job

I liked the idea that you had for this poem but I think that if you went into a bit more detail as to what the kid was feeling when this happened to him and how suprised and everything he was then it would be a bit better.

Good topic. You write very well...

Josie

I think there could be more emotion and depth in this...
The flow seemed off most of the times, and I thought it was much to short.
Also, try not to use so many fillers, as a lot of the time that is what throws the flow off.