Personally, I liked the title. I don't think you need to change it, it fits the poem nicely.
You are much braver than I am. I don't know if I could write a poem like this. Your choice of words are amazing. I loved it.

Oh, don't worry, this is better than many explicit poems out there : )

I think the titiel is fine, but I'd consider changing it either to "body and soul combined," or "bodies and souls combined," so that the numbers match.

There are a couple minor things that don't really have to do with the content, but you coiuld change them to make it nicer to read. like in the second stz.:

"with the slightest of your touch" could be "slightest touch of yours," or "slightest of your touches."

or, 4th stz:

"I moan with excite" I know you're trying to have a rhyme for "delight," but this phrase is kind of awkward. You could perhaps change the action to him - say, "you charm and excite," or something, and the meaning would be apparent there. Just an idea.

I really liked this thought:

"Knowing now, our souls are entwined forever." Like, the act was the consummation of binding the two, or something. Very nice.

Anyway, so yeah! I hope some of these points help! Good job

Oh i know this was a great poem. the words that you used show real love. well done. the inspiration in this poem must have come from the heart. i loved this poem. some special guy in your life? hope he can appreciate you for who you are. real looooove.

5/5 David

I LOVED this!
I thought it was beautifully written, imagery was wonderfully done and the flow was perfect throughout.
You did a great job with this, you should be proud.

Excellent poem.. you describe things so beautifully and really stay away from the dirty and vulgar words some people use.. you really make it clear that you are in so much love with this person..

also i think the title is really great too

This was really interesting for your first explict you poem you wrote this very well, as i know from experience they are difficult. The title i loved kept me guessing what it was about and was very eye capturing. The words described beautifully.

You push me hard up against the wall
Bodies pressed together, I will give you my all

loved the two lines. Sweet and erotic. Great poem~mel

The title drew me in, the poem finished me off I mean the word choice and the vocab here was absoulty perfect, beautifully written, deep emtuon, vivid imagery, and excelletn flow again you have done a great job, keep up hte good work.

OH WOW!
That is one hott poem!
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The imagery was brilliant, & it had a great flow & was full of emotion.
Hahaa im speechless.
Excellent!!
Well deserved 5/5!
Bekkah.x

I love this poem! its better than mine i have to say...way to go!