Comments : That Night

  • 16 years ago

    by Melpomene

    Realy enjoyed this poem it was beautiful and diffeerent. The imagery great vocab nice flowed greatly and portrayed a great story. Well done with this. Nicely penned poem ~mel

  • 16 years ago

    by BrokenREALiTy

    She starts to get self consience,
    conscious

    She looks her best tonite, &
    Tonite is going to be perfect,
    Tonight .

    I like it . It doesn`t specify the event, and it could go with a lot of things . I liked the imagery, and it was different . I especially like the last two lines .
    ..__MiNDYY

  • 16 years ago

    by tyanna

    Tonite should have been tonight.. and I think you should reword "she can barely bare it"..It just didn't flow with the rest of the poem. Other than that it was great..4/5

  • 16 years ago

    by MaSkEdSoUl

    The flow was good until I read this line:

    "She can barely bare it."

    It doesnt flow right with the rest of the poem, maybe re-word it, find something that flows perfectly with this piece. It goes with every event cuz it doesnt say which event specifically. Well I'd give you a 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    This is amazing.. I really liked it.. im not sure if its talking about prom or graudation cause I got the impression it could be either one. the only line I would change would be this one "She can barely bare it." the double b's kinda throw it off a little bit.. nice job though

  • 16 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I really liked this, as you didn't actually say what was going to happen tonight, and that leaves the reader's imagination open.

    Flow was good for the most part, but at times it was a little off. I enjoyed the imagery you used, it created vivid pictures.

  • 16 years ago

    by tears i cry

    Good but what exactly isnt she is proud of 4/5 for gret poem but not telling me what it was about