Unhappily Ever After...

by Jorge Luis   Apr 18, 2007


Once long ago in the bleak days of yore...
When the heavens cried ice, & hinted of war...
A magical queen quite true & fair...
Ended a saga drenched of despair...

See I was like many before her beginning...
striving to settle rather than winning...
But great was the creature who gave me the wings...
To rise over peasants, & all earthly kings...

She took me to valleys so far from horror
dodging the meaning of a word they call sorrow...
Navigating with kisses that lit like 10 suns...
& sweeter than armies of cinnamon buns...

Filled me with joy, filled me with beauty...
Fulfilling my void, she made this her duty...
Gave me the night, & loaned me the stars...
Surgeon of sadness she healed all my scars...

But sadly, & shortly her ecstasy faded...
Leaving me crippled!...broken!..unaided!...
Highlighting chapters of a tale once so pure...
Though no happy ending, & no easy cure...

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  • 9 years ago

    by Britt Bratt

    WowðŸ'ŒðŸ'Œ

  • 15 years ago

    by Ren

    I know I have commented on this before but I've read it again and I'm still blown away at how AMAZING this poem is! I absolutley LOVE it! The way everything flows and the awesome imagery! Its soo awesome!
    My favorite part...
    "Filled me with joy, filled me with beauty...
    Fulfilling my void, she made this her duty...
    Gave me the night, & loaned me the stars...
    Surgeon of sadness she healed all my scars.."--W.O.W... the word choice..the flow.. the meaning.. the imagery... AMAZING! ^_^
    Please do keep writing! You have so much talent! Keep in touch!
    Always smile :)

  • 16 years ago

    by yelitza

    Thats beautiful .......itz mad deep props 2 u.....so wuts good?

  • 16 years ago

    by Ren

    Wow, this was amazing! I love all the words you chose and how you tied everything together! Great job! Please keep writing your wonderful poems! And thank you for the comment on mine, it means a lot! :]

  • 16 years ago

    by Nebula

    I really love this. Reads and flows nicely. Choice of words are great. (I did however have to mentally remove the ellipses. I think it flow much better, but I assume there is a reason for them ;) ) 5/5

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