That was sad. I am glad it was fiction. You made it seem like you experienced it. Good job on evoking emotion in the reader.

You wrote this as if it had happend to you. The way you made us see every detail was suberb.

One small thing though. In the fourth stanza, fourth line I think you ment to say "She'll make it" instead of "She make it"

Oh how sad, I too am glad that this is only fiction (for you at least). This has probably happened to many people and if they were to read this poem I think they would say you have done an excellent job in reflecting their emotions. Very well written :)

Damn girl, if I hadn't seen at the end that it was fictional........ this write brought tears to my eyes, I could feel the emotion and pain within! Well done, my sweet, well done.

Another fine oiece of writing. You're a good talent!

Excellent poem, everything about it was great , could really feel the pain in it, great job, your friend Tracy ~5/5~

THAT MADE ME CRY. Literally.

You write so beautifully. I'm glad this is fictional, but it still really got to me... You definitely have tons of talent. Every single poem that you write has so much put emotion put into it, and the words always flow perfectly. Great job with this!

Great poem! i cant believe it... even if its fiction... its really good!!!!! great job and 5/5!!!
~*~SKye~*~