I really liked this poem, It was dar and nicely written the first line kept me interested from start to finish really drawed my attention. I think this poem deserves a 5/5 from me. Good job~mel

This is brilliant so sad and intense, can visualise the scene through your words.
Great write dear.

Chavii.

An amazing piece indeed, loved the way you created the whole situation and presented it. Great flow and good selection of words.

Keep writing

all the best and take care

I really like this poem, it is really good and you painted a picture for my mind. :)
<3
L.C

Great poem had a nice flow great story told very well and wording was great ,keep up the great work, ~5/5 your friend Tracy

Luv it and i luv the flow through the poem

Wow....very powerful. I really enjoyed it....excellent flow

I love you poem! great stuff!