Wow, this was definetely unique. I loved how you used a different style, it made your poem different and helped keep my attention better. I liked it but I felt since it was so short I would have liked a little more detail. It was very good though and sometimes such as with this one short is better but I feel a teeny bit more detail would have benefited it. The flow was good and the emotion was clear. I love the last few lines. Nicley done hun 5/5

I think your style is really diffrent, from most poems on this site. Diffrent in a good way of course. THe flow was perfect and the emtion clear. You have done a very good job here. 5/5

Loved the style of this poem it was different but unique at the same time. This poem kept my attention from start to finish it was short but i think you said alot in such a short piece of poetry. This was very good the emotion was strong and the flow great. Well done on a nicely penned poem you have written. Deserves a 5/5 in my eyes. Good work ~mel

Wow thats really good!!! i like it...i like your writing style....

I'm quite confused about what it's about actually maybe you should a little thing on the bottom

This is actually chuckle funny to such as myself...good show..