This is really good!!! you have got definite talent!!! keep up the great work....

Yes until the end I was a tad confused hah but anyways the poem was lovely! I liked it and the beggining stanza was fabulous nicely done!

I loved your vocab you used throughout the poem that really caught my eye and from then i knew this would be a great poem. I liked this mainly because it kept me interested at the start i didnt know what would be happening but as i read deeper into the poem it showed and was very interesting. I liked the title because its different and definitly gets the readers attention. I say well done on a nicely written piece of poetry you have here. 5/5 ~mel

I have to say.
This is quite amazing.
You're in one of my faves, by the way. Lol.
But still.
It's confusing.
And I love that.
I love anything metaphorical.
It took me 3 reads to understand. Lol.
But still it's good.
But not as good as one of the other
Poems that you wrote.

Hey... an intresting read... i have to say i had to open dictionary.com in a new tab, and then try and work out what this metaphor you have going on hear... I might be completely wrong hear, but i recon its about religion... How new idea's seem to scare other people, how they dont like them... As religion doesnt seem to welcome other idea's, maybe your trying to metaphorically say that lfor example, how christiantiy reacts to gay's...I dont know.. that kinda what i got out of the poem. I also got the theory of evoloution form it by you using the word "Sac" whcih is a baglike structure of animals...Im probably completely wrong in all of this but yeah at least i tried?
Anywyas about the poem, the title instantly catches the readers attention, it makes them wonder waht the poem is going to be about. I have to say i loved your use of enjambment in this peace, kinda reminds me of Heany's work... I liked the allitertions youve used in the thrid stanza, "crystal cradle" and "citrus colours". My favourite thing about this is the fact it makes you think. I speant quite long on this peom, i re read it much more times then i usually re read poems. Ilike the symobolism that new moons and fruit bowl creates...
An amazing read. Keep writing. Please PM me and tell me what the metaphor was acctually for? Take care xx

This is different and that's the best part of it. You've written it so well that definitely shows your talent. This one is one of the best poems I've read in this site. Keep writing. Take care.

I enjoyed reading this, very unique and something that makes you ponder. well done