Excellent poem. I loved the story behind it almost like remo and Juliet. Those that are ment to be togather will find a way, all hope is not lost. Good write. 5/5

I loved the story behind this poem it was told very well. The emotion was great flowed nicely the ryhme scheme was good. let me just say well done on a nicely penned love poem. Straight from the heart. ~mel

Amazing, nicely written, and it told a story, excellent! v my favorite stanza

"If only love truly conquered all
Maybe we could finally be together
Living life the way it should be
As light and care free as a feather "

5/5

Wow thats sad but so true, i loved it. amazing stuff...

**Only at night can we love
At day we must hide
We can't speak to one another
Only kiss with our eyes**

kissing with your eyes, is very powerful, agian sad poem but great job.

melissa

Cute poem.
Really good the flow was
pretty good, and the rhyme
didn't seemed forced. Well
done! 5/5
<3Tay^_^ily

Hey,
Sorry i owe you two ocmments and i only left you one. I had to go. Anyways i really enjoyed this poem. Love poems are really emotive and depening on what type of love poem it is they are usually quite heartwarming. You did a good job on this one. I can find a proper rhyme scheme hear but the poem itself was quite touching. I liked how at the begining you drew the reader into the poem by describing your feelings, then this changes and you talk about your differences. But oppisites do attract. ;) To improve i suggest you use a more varied use of punctuation other then that a great read! Keep writing! xx

At my highschool we just finished our unit on Romeo and Juliet, so I totally get where you're comming from. (We had to rewrite the prologe sonnet, perhaps I should submit that poem . . .) Anyways, very well writen. 5/5

Loved it. it's easiliy related to because everyone has hope for something, eh. Wonderful job :D

Hmmm...don't really know west side story...
but it kinda reminds romeo and juliet...
now, about the poem itself =) :

the theme you chose is beautiful, it flows very nicely and it makes the reader fell like you are speaking to him/her...
5/5

*isabel*

I like this write. to me i think my favorite lines have to be the 5th stanza. it speaks to me more than the rest and has enough thought for its own poem in my eyes. (:

good work.

Nicely written 5/5