Really great poem!...i like your metaphors!!..great job!

This poem had great meaning portrayed behind it I think the emotions were quite effective but the structure really let this down. I think you should try and put this into stanzas and made the lines look more effective. Then this poem would look a little neater. Other then that good job~Mel

I cried again...becuz i just broke up with a boy i went out with for a whole year and it was a very serious relationship...i thought i loved him...but i did love ur poem...now that i know!!!