First off i'd like to say thanks on commenting my poem =) much appreciated. Secondly wow this was anamazing poem, The word choice and vocab u used throughout this was strong deep and powerful, I loved the flow and the emotion portrayed was fantastic. The only thing i would say is you should maybe work a little on the structure, maybe putting this into stanzas because i think it would be a great styled poem. Some of the lines need to be made shorter and to the length of others to even out the flow just a little so the syllable count is better but other then them to things which i cant vote lower then a 5 for as this style could be your own personal one, I found this to be great. Well done on a nicely written poem~mel