Very good!...good start for poetry!
You're rigth..this wourld is messed up...and people do need to realize that if we keep screwing up the world well..we won't have it anymore.
i get involved in as many save the enviorment activites i can at school..and i am semivegitarian..
Good work..now challange urself..add the rhymes!

Good Job and good Luck!
~shannon!~

The emotion in this poem was powerful and I really love poems written with raw passion. However, a minor suggestion I have is to try to eliminate the repitition of words. In some cases is worked well, but in the beginning the repition of 'Here' and 'There' were distracting and disrupted the flow. All in all though, I loved this poem. It held such an important message for people. Great job.5/5.

This is a little like my poem ; What have you done to our world', lol, erm... i like the last stanza it begins to open ideas and maybe you may get through to people this way. By writing a poem like this you open peoples thoughts even if its just a small percentage, to change one purspective is to have succeded well done i love poetry like this.

xxx alex xxx (1)

Ok first the repitition of the word there made this poem dull. I think you could've used some more creativity in this piece because it's such a broad subject. You also had some grammer issues.

Why are humans so blind?
There are those how don't care.

how should be who I think but anways nice job

Very true piece. 5/5 for you keep it up!

Great issue to write about, and your words are passionate and true.

There were some gramatical errors,but I understood the message that you were making.

Well done x

Third Stanza; you have two mispellings both of them are who, typed as how.

I liked this poem because it makes you think about what is truly wrong with the world. And, though you only tipped the iceberg, it set off fireworks in my head. And, I'm sure it has in others.

Really good, lots of emotion in this poem.. i really liked it. its true also thats what makes it so good. keep writting!

Okay, this out of all the one's I've read is better, this was outstanding, I loved that you asked the question at the end. The world is seriously messed up.. And this poem did a great job saying it, very powerful, very emotional. Nice piece of art. Keep working at it. =)
-Ally

You did a good job. It is true with the world today. please keep writting and I will keep reading. 4/5