I think that was a very very well written poem. It made me slightly sad.
'But u fade slowly away'..fix the 'u' to 'you' hun..it will look a tiny bit better. Keep up the good work. 5/5
Xx Chrissie

Well done. that made me sad. so i cuould feel the emtion strong in this one. I can realte. 5/5

I wasn't sure if the person in this poem died or not. That's just what I got from it. It was a nice poem. I think the word usage could have been a little better for being such a small poem. But great work! It was indeed lovely!

This is a nicely written poem, but so sad.
i like the style you used
you are really talented.keep it up
a 5/5 from me because u really deserve it.

Another great poem. I really liked the flow in this one! Great job! 5/5

Great poem, but there's one mistake in second line: theres should be there's.
5/5,"I don't see the stars shine, closed my eyes
Left in rain, I'm screaming your name" -really strong imagery, fantastic lines.

It was such a heartacheing and sad poem take care 5/5

Aww what emotion, soo sad...awesome stuff!
5/5
- ali xxxxxxxxxxxx