Comments : The Pain Suffocates (acrostic)

  • 16 years ago

    by Jaded Serenity

    I think this is a great poem, if you feel really depessed writting poetry is a great way to get feelings out, when you write just use words to describe exactly how you feel.
    take care,
    Julia jade

  • 16 years ago

    by Startle Me

    I effing love it.
    I love poems that don't rhyme.
    To me, they're more mysterious.
    Lol.
    But the third line in the first stanza
    I think that could be changed into
    Something different
    For example
    Emotions fill my cup.
    Or something like that.
    Other wise.
    5/5 ?

  • 16 years ago

    by Teria

    Ohhh. I liked this poem. :D I love acrostic poems, they're quite fun to do, and read. Keep it up, hunni.

  • 16 years ago

    by Renan

    Good Poem,
    nice felling you gave to it
    and it really impulsive.
    Good job.

  • 16 years ago

    by ImNotPerfect20

    I like it.. yes its short..and very sad.. anyway good job.. keep up the good work.

  • I enjoyed this one alot, short and simple, yet what you want to say is there, I didn't even realize it was an acrostic until I read your comment saying that it was the first one you had written *Like this*
    I thought it was great, they are alot of fun to read and write, I just wrote one, similar title. But anyhow, great work, keep it up girly.
    -Ally

  • 16 years ago

    by Vanessa

    I think you did a good job. it is hard to do something that you are not familair with, or comfortable with. The ones I did were my first of this type to. I loved it 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Allison

    I liked how this one was set up. It reminding me of the poems that they had us write using our names in school. The flow was really nice. ^.^

    Alyson

  • 16 years ago

    by Boy

    Very short but touchy. it touched my heart great work 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    I really love this one...excellent acrostic!...short but well penned!
    Good job!
    5/5
    xxPoojaxx

  • I effing love it good job maybe you can check out some of my poems maybe maybe not:)~melissaraye~

  • 16 years ago

    by KeyxMashingxParody

    Very good. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden

    Last line first verse, I think you mean every instead of ever. I thought it was great. I love the metaphors you used along with the word choice. Bravo. :) A five from me for sure.

  • 15 years ago

    by Daisy

    GRE|ATTT!!!! 5/5