Thats an awsome poem.. really opened my eyes.. its so sad what the world is coming to these days.. 5/5

This is too true and amazing! publish!

When I read it in my head, I was left speechless. But, when I went back and read it out loud, it took me awhile to get through because of the choppy flow. And I noticed also, how some beginning words are not capitalized with the rest, which not all poets do, but it would make it look a lot neater if they all were.

Anyways, I really loved this, despite what I have said already. It really spoke to me..this is truly society these days and it continually gets worse. You took a great muse and used it to your advantage. Kudos on that.

"A jock, a prep, a rich kid,
these labels are as good as trash"

^^ I REALLY liked those lines. Something in them spoke to me.

"How long with these atrocities last?" Change with to will? I think that would make more sense.

But, good job Dear. I liked this. =)

5.5

At the very beginning.
It didn't catch my attention at all
But when I kept reading
I realized how much a lot of what you
Said was correct
So I kept reading and reading
Agreeing and agreeing.
I loved this poem.
To me it's factual.
I give it a 5/5 :]

"How pathetic has our society come to be?
Every person feels so out of place,
Small attempts to make everyone matter
But we're spiraling downward at a rapid pace"

That stanza was amazing..
The whole poem hold such a powerful message
You're a pro at doing that!
5/5
*Gem*

(And no, i've never heard of that band, or that song. It was just a title contest and thats the title i did )

Very powerful message and i hope people really try to understand what has been told here.

Conveying such message shows ur concern and true soul..great write indeed

all the best and take care

Wow, very true. I especially like the part about the labels, labels are hella dumb, they mean nothing. All in all, good job.

K

Great poem!....loved ur wrk!...very powerful peice!
...so true n beautiful!!
love it!
xxPoojaxx

Deep meaning, its easy to read the message, its loud n clear, i realise what you mean, but i would never have been able to put it into words, this poem is so....raw, its incredible, you put it so simply.

Yay, you're 11th comment. =D Very strong poem =) And it's so totally true! And that's why I like it, I think more people should realize this =)! Keep up the good work.
xxx