Well though i dont really feel how much so sad this poem i really appreciate it. but i love the flow i think is kinda complete and it well written. and i can see it was sweet and sad poetry. pretty good!

I really hope this girl knows how much you care about her. Another job well done. Your work just blows me away. I loved the way you worded this poem most of all. Extraordinary job.

Hey,
i love this poem, the flow is great and i enjoyed reading it. I hope this girl knows how you feel about her. great work 5/5
kisses Stephanie

Naw this was so sad. the love in this poem too was evident. excellent work. loved the way you set it all out. unique and refreshing!

5/5 David

Nice poem, enjoyed the read. OUr club rules

This was a well written peice of sad poetry. the flow was good, well penned, emtions were strong and clear. good job 4/5

Hey,
I have to say i really quite enjoyed this poem. I liked the emotion behind it. I liked the first stanza mainly becuase of your repitition of "Broken in two" on the first and third stanza. The flow was ok, and the structure was kindof like a pyramid. I htought that was a little messy and oculd of been improved. I liked your vocaburay usage especially in the third stanza. The emotion in the poem seems really real and really touches the readers heart. And the end stanza concludes the poem saying that she's still special and she still means so much to me. It shows your love for this girl. One thing i didnt like baout it was that it didnt use any punctuation. I thought using punctuation and enjambment would help your work. Other then that it was an ok read. Keep writing! xx

Poor thing...
I know exactly ho this feels..
It sucks and I don't know if there is a good way to handle it really.
I thought this poem was really good though and a lot of people will be able to relate to it nice job!

Wow dude,
this is another brillent poem by you.
you are so great and reading your poems takes me to a different world where i just want to continue reading it again and again.
beautifuly penned.
keep it up like always.

Wow this poem was really good. I loved it. the only critique that I have is "Brokenhearted I lay saddened," should be "Broken hearted I lay saddened," Broken hearted is two words not one. Although I liked this peice I find that the flow of this poem was a little off.

Wow this really is such a sad sad poem.
I love it!
I also liked the way of describing your love for this person, and your will to just simply not willing to love anyone else. This really shows how deep the love for this person is and i think that is such a beautiful thing.
Other then that I think this is a very strong poem and that it flows very well. Excellent choice of words too.

5/5

xo angelique

Usually, I prefer poems that rhyme, but this one I really enjoyed. Love needs not to rhyme.
I can relate to this poem 100%

5/5