All in all the poem was great. The message and feeling behind the poem helped the reader enjoy the writing. However in the 4th stanza the rhyming seems incredibly forced..
Perhaps instead of using

"But he doesn't pick up"

^Perhaps say 'But he doesn't answer'. I suggest answer because it seems to have more rhymes available and will help express your feelings better? Anway, the poem was great and I really enjoyed reading this.
-AOTD/Kurt

Thats so sad.. it almost made me cry.. very emotional.. a very nice read!.. flowed well and also rhymed.. all and all a very nice job.. 5/5

That made me want to cry...
I couldn't help imagining myself in that situation because the words seemed so real...
Such a heartbreaking poem..
5/5
*Gem*

Oh my googdness i got the chills while rading this i hope that didnt happen to you if it did im realy sorry

This is a great poem about something that no one wants to go through. Keep up the good work. *5/5*

♥ Alyson ♥

The vocabulary in this is perfecto.
Although the poem seemed story like.
It was just average.
The story was fantastic, though.
It was very creative. 5/5 :]

That was sad. Some of the rhymes seemed a little forced, but the emtion was clear and strong. The word choice was good, but a few words could have been changed to deliver more power. All in all a great job.