Fall

by Autumn   May 4, 2007


Orange leaves dance in front of my eyes,
The wind pressing against my face,
Making me cold.
But the sun shines down on me,
Through the cracks of the fallen leaves.
The world seems darker through the shadows,
That fall across me.
The log I am sitting on colder than before,
Kicking my feet, causing a stir in the earth.
I stand with a dry taste in my mouth,
Both hands in the cotton of my pockets,
And diffidently move on to winter.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Gem

    It depends how you pronounce it... like with every word in the dictionary. =/
    But it's right and that's what counts so thanks for pointing it out but it's ok.
    *Gem*

  • 16 years ago

    by Gem

    ""Cleansing our tired earth"

    "Soaking everything"

    They both have 6 syllables. But I guess how its how you say it. Normally, though, to shorten the a syllable you could put an apostraphy. Ex. Because, 'cause. "

    I have no idea where you got six syllables from... maybe it's cos your from the 'all mighty USA'

    "Clean-sing our tired earth"

    "Soak-ing eve-ry-thing"

    Five syllables each... =/ Neither need an apostrophe because it's not relevant.
    Happy now?

  • 16 years ago

    by Gem

    Some excellent imagery

    I would just like to ask you something, you commented on my haiku collection and simply, said

    "The poems were good, but some of the syllables were off."

    Now a haiku count is, 5,7,5 and after i went back to my poem, there was no 'off syllables' so i just wanted to know where you got the idea that there was.
    *Gem*

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