Comments : Five Confessions Of A Murderer

  • 16 years ago

    by Vanessa

    I can't believe that no one has commented on this poem yet. Omg that was so moving, beautifully wriiten in such a unique style, I was carried away by the emtions I felt pouring out of this one. I absoultly loved this peice. An excellent job, as always. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    That was a violent poem but nevertheless a good read.
    I liked how you summarised the poem to begin with, and then went on to tell the story.
    I didn't understand the third line of the third stanza,
    "Wonder is it was good or bad, right or wrong."
    Maybe you meant "wonder if it was good..."

    Also, on the last line of the sixth stanza maybe you could add punctuation (maybe a semi colon) between "life" and "so" as this will make it easier to read.

    I enjoyed the ending too - it was very final.
    The subtle use of repetition to begin and end with worked to your advantage.

    Thanks for sharing.

  • 16 years ago

    by tryinXtoXholdXmyXheadXup

    This is powerful, emotion packed and well written. i havent seen this style alot so this is good, unique. the poem is a great write and the emotion is felt through out the whole poem, keep it up,
    nessa

  • 16 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    ''The middle confession is a messed up love;
    How far would one go?
    To help someone who you truly loved
    Would you help give her back her soul? ''

    I adore that stanza, I thought it was beautifully written and very hardhitting.
    I enjoyed the repetition, it got your point across beautifully.
    The imagery created vivid pictures and flow was flawless throughout.

  • 16 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    I love the title! I enjoyed this poem! the flow was good! nice choice of words! very powerful! 5/5!

  • 16 years ago

    by LostKitsune

    Wow...this is good...i like the ending...

  • 16 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    We all have feelings that are confessions, but most never speak of them. I liked this poem and the meaning in it's words, "he took her life; so I took his" I really liked that line. Excellent job again 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Midnight Sun

    Um ok...honestly, I was a little confused. I mean I couldn't really catch on to who was talking. At first it sounded like the murderer, but then it sounded like someone taking revenge on the murderer. But then I thought it might have the been the murderer who then took his own life. So I just wasn't sure. But it was an amazing idea...and it was actually chill giving. I mean after I reread it I liked it more...I would say that it has a lot of potential. I mean the main idea that threads through was very pure and it remained steady, but again it was a little confusing. I hope that made at least a little sense and helped you a little. :)
    ~Midnight Sun

  • 16 years ago

    by Domino0792

    Hey, hows it going? Ok so everyone who has previously commented on this poem have most likely said it all but here his my littlt opinion. I enjoyed the poem, firstly beacuse of the confessions are realistic, they felt as if one had actually committed these sins. Secondly because that this peom holds originality and flare, and an ability to reach within a reader and make them test themselves and question themselves on whether the can understand this poem and its meaning.

    My favourite stanza was:
    My final confession is overwhelming grief;
    As I stand nearing her grave
    Tears roll down as realisation occurs;
    He took her life; so I took his.

    This stanza has this emotional barrier and when you begin to understand this peom you can begin to understand the barrier to this stanza and its heart felt emotion! Great work, excellently penned. -xx-

    Criptix Within.

  • 16 years ago

    by [[Get Ya Wicked On]]

    Interesting, I liked it. -T. Jane

  • 16 years ago

    by Anaisthitos

    This poem was very deep. I could tell he was stuck in a really deep love, and the anger of how this abusive man treated his love made the murderer decide to kill him. I think it was an amazing poem, I could imagine the struggle he was going through. I loved it! 5/5