Ah this was excellent. the love in this, the loss too. but this flowed really well, you don't need a poem to rhyme to be good. this was excellent, and in a sense it did rhyme. this touched a cord within me. i loved it.

5/5 always, David

I loved it.
I'm sure a lot of people could relate to this poem.

The flow was great and your word choices were excellent.

'She tells herself she doesn't need you anymore
While salty tears catch the reflection of the light
Falling where there once was the smile on her face
The pain sets in, but it will be gone by dawn'

Love it ^^

Keep it up 5/5

[Sarah]

Wow i really like this poem......great poem..5/5..........check out some of my poems if u would thankz...

Great Job...5/5..check out mine

This was a really great poem, I enjoyed it alot, The emotion was strong word choice brilliant and the structure amazing. Well done on a nicely written poem~mel

Wow!!..really touching n beautiful..te emotion portrayed in the peice was strong n the choice of words excellnt...n i can soo relate...Beautiful work!..u deserve a 5/5!..nothing less
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xxPoojaxx

Wow.. this is such a beautifu poem.. very vivid and filled with great detail which really help the reader feel your hurt.. the flow was nice except in this stanza

Learning the hard way is better than not
Facing her ignorance with a bruised heart
It's not shattered; it survived this time
Next time she may not be so lucky

i dont like how the first line just fades into the next, however, the words itself are amazing and this is still my favorite stanza.. wonderful wording :D

'She tells herself she doesn't need you anymore
While salty tears catch the reflection of the light
Falling where there once was the smile on her face
The pain sets in, but it will be gone by dawn'

This staza is so powerfully spoken, and the word choice and imgery used here are the best

Learning the hard way is better than not
Facing her ignorance with a bruised heart
It's not shattered; it survived this time
Next time she may not be so lucky

And this staza is deep, and strong as well, both are my favorites

The poem overal, had excellent vocab, and amazing well chosen words, that held stong emtion, pinted a vivid picture in my mind, and the flow was almost flowless. you did another excellent job 5/5

Aww i love it! i can totally relate to it 2.. i love how you worded it an everythin.. its so beautiful.. keep it up 5/5.. an thanx for commentin mine 2
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