Oh i loved it. that is good. 5/5 excellent

This poem is really good.. dont down grade your stuff. you do an awsome job on your poems. keep it up 5/5

Hey,
an excellent love poem especially for a first time writing love poems, you should write more of those =) good flow, great work 5/5
kisses stephanie

Excellent work!!!...if this ur first love poem...lol..u can go ahead and write a lot more of this type!!.....very beutifully penned!
kp up de good wrk!
xxPoojaxx

Yeah this was a good poem about love... You have some nice and meaningful lines andf the structure is ok ... Im not a love poemt myself so thats all I can say about it

good job =D

"The azure sky shinning down" -- The sky doesn't shine by itself. I think this needs to be changed in wording and/or structure. Besides, you repeated the same point (the azure sky: night sky) in two lines which is unnecessary.

"The azure sky shinning down" (sic) ( = Shining is misspelled.)
"Beside you feels like heaven" (sic) ( = feel is misspelled.)

This piece began with a rather plaintive tone, but then it suddenly shifted not only in its pitch, but also in its desired point--a plea for the recognition of the person's love. I'd suggest you to fix and tighten up the lines to enhance the flow and focus only to one point at a time in order to remain consistent. Thanks for sharing. =]

Aww for me this is the best one.. Very touching and sweet. Meaningful and love the emotions in it! Amazing poem! Keep up the great work! :)

Another lovely poem. It is great rather it is your first love poem or not:) Keep up the great work. 5/5

You got this love thing down your words carry your emotions well great job would like to see other subjects Plot121

Once again, another great poem. You have talant.

This is the line every girl wants to hear.>>

"I'll never fail for you
I'll stand up for you until I die"

A couple of things I thought were off, the flow and such, but it wasn't too bad.

The message was powerful.

The poem was very sweet and beautiful. keep writing kiddo. =) 4/5

~Ally~

Awh made me smile XD. You definantly have a way with love poems ^_^. Beautiful.

Very pretty and beautiful. you have a real talent for writing love poems, so dont ever stop

Very good. The repetition is good, with a nice flow to support the piece. There aren't many things to improve on, but here they are:

"Beside you feels like heaven" - just put 'Being' before 'Beside', the line will make more sense this way.

"Will you stay with me through eternity?" - change the word 'through' to 'for'.

Erm. Hmm. And, oh, try to avoid too many '..'. The full stop has much more significance as opposed to the '..'.

Other than that, the poem was great. Well done! :)

I liked this poem it was so sweet and meaingful. I think if you got rid of a few of the I's it would be much better. But nice work still. I really liked how you were expressing your love to someone thats a very hard thing to do. "The stars are falling for us" my favorite line.. so powerful.

Awh. I loved it. :D I think you could work on punctuation though, it threw off the flow a bit in this poem. Not your others, but this one it did. The syllables a little bit as well, not that much though.
Other than those two minor t hings you did a wonderful job with this poem.
Keep it up!

A few fillers, minor grammer mistakes, and the flow was rocky, but other than that it was great, the emtion was strong and the word choice painted a clear image.

Again, I enjoyed the repetition.
Emotion and depth shine through the words, the first stanza is a beautiful opener and it gets better from there on.
I noticed there were quite a few fillers in this one to, try to eliminate some of them in your writing, it helps flow improve greatly.