This was beautifully penned. The first stanza was strong and captured my attention urging me to read on. The feeling of pain, sadness and happiness weave through this write. I thought it was an awesome write!!

I'm glad I read the comments before I posted mine..... I was going to say exactly the same as Sunny did..... drop the filler words. Other than that I think its a beautiful and inspiring poem.... you've used some wonderful words, well done. On to read some more. You've asked for help in the group, so we are gonna help...... lol

Amazing poem, it is full of emotion and wonderfully written...I have no further criticism as for what others said. Keep it up!!!

After reading ONE poem it's clear that you have talent! Girl, you need any of us to tell you that you can...grab your pen and get busy!!! :) This is a very nice write...

I started writing when I was a little younger than you. I would write and then rip it up. I loved writing ever since I was YOUNG but never thought I was any good. It wasn't until I was 18-19 that I started saving my writes and sharing them. Don't be silly like that. WRITE - WRITE - WRITE...let me tell you, even if I thought your writing was boring and dull, I would tell you the same thing. Even if YOU were the only in the world who liked your writing...that is reason enough to keep going. This is YOU...this is YOURS...don't count on anyone else because YOU are the only one who come through!!!!!

Beautiful write my friend. KEEP WRITING!!!!!