I like this. Some of your phrasing is a bit clumsy (e.g. blackened covered) but it's an engaging read with plenty of atmosphere and pathos.

This is very good terra, mean it, i like the story it unfolds, i give it a perfect 5/5!!! keep them coming!!! and sorry it took me so long to comment!!!

Gr88 poem..very maningful...gr8 write
keep it up:D
bree