Well done, I like the organization style you used, I've never seen it before. The ryhme was wonderful and it was a good quick read. It tells a story as well while you're reading it. Keep up the good work.
5/5

Hey,
I really enjoyed this poem. The flow was good nad your vocabulary was excellent. The title i thought you should of changed it to something that will make the reader more intrested in reading thepoem. I liked the message you had in this poem. And i liekd the kinda story it told. I loved this stanza in particula;

"Shattered image of the perfect girl,
Condfidence dwindled, darkness swirled."

I really liked teh seound line of this. Youve got this rhyme hear. As well as alliteration with; "dwindled, darkness". When reading this i kinda paused in the middle of these two words, and this had a great affect. A good poem. Can i suggest you use mroe varied punctuation. Keep writing! xx

The very beginning seemed a bit forced.
But just by a little bit.
The second line was a bit random, though.
First you were talking about inspiration
Then you started talking about
The image of your girl.
Reading it again...
I kind of thought your whole poem was a bit random.
Just some peices put in together to make
One whole poem.
I thought it was just weird.
Sorry for the harsh comment.
I'll give you a 4
But PM me if you want it.
If you don't, it's all good.

This 1 is really good...
"Shattered image of the perfect girl,
Condfidence dwindled, darkness swirled."
^^My fave line!!...Very beautiful...rhyme scheme was good too...Kp writing!....a good 5/5!!:-)

xxPoojaxx

Another great poem,
i have to say this was one of your best ones, and thank you for the dedication... you are truly a great writer and hopefully soon a published author.
life is steps and we should always be willing to take next step and see where we end up.
great job once again.

I really enjoyed this, I found it to be very uplifting and inspirational.
Flow was good throughout, and though rather short it was filled with emotion.