Comments : Povertys Abyss

  • 16 years ago

    by Vanessa

    Wow Robert you took a diffcult subject, and made it into something to be proud of. The flow was a little off in a couple of places, but nothing major, other than that and A few grammmer errors, this was perfect. I loved the word choice you used, and the emtion was deep and powerful. The message was clear, and I agree. Wonderful write Robert, As always you have spoke to my soul. Truly you are a talented writter.

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow, excellent poem. It's really touching and the imagery in it is great. I like the rhyming, too.
    You write superbly.
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Wallace

    Very good, I thought it was meaningful and inspirational, something we all need to hear every once in a while. Great job. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by homebound

    Wow! great imagery and really made me think and experience what was going on! awesome job!

  • 16 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    You seem to have captured the plight of a homeless woman very eloquently. It is indeed a very worthy theme and the poem is well written It would however be easier for me to read broken into stanzas

  • 15 years ago

    by WrittenInTheStars

    Excellent poem. Took my breath away. I do agree with Michael.. it would be easier to read if it were put into stanzas.. Other than that it's great. 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    A touching and inspiring write.

    There is so much sadness in this world and poverty of the third world variety is perhaps the cruelest. To be born into an area of such hardship is like being born in hell. The children don't have a choice and it is just a matter of survival. Whenever I think about these poor people it makes me realise how lucky we really are to have roofs over our head and food to eat. I agree that we should contribute whenever we can, but also not be too hard on ourselves about the lack of world change...that is for the leaders of this corrupt world to alter....and that I fear is not about to change any time soon.

    Well done on takling this topic, it is really touching.

    Michael

  • 15 years ago

    by Nobodys Hero

    I loved the chioce of poem you decided to write about it added extra difficulty yet you managed to make the poem work well, overall i would say this poem is very good, great job!