Wow thats sexy and hot, good job, 5/5

Wow! Thats.... yeah, I would call it provocative, but it doesn't seem to be a strong enough word. A nice description of a wonderful moment. It does stir images in the mind, as any great poem will do. I like it.

OH WOW, very descriptive, erotic, hot, spicy... what a steamy write this one is. The words you choose were perfect, you captured a beautiful moment that lovers share with such finesse..... well done, very f u c k i n well done!!

Great job :)

Wow...just loved it...so descriptive i swear i could see what was hapenin right inside my head:D
id lke to read more of these ahah
keep up the gr8 work:D
bree

Wooooh! This is outstanding dude. I enjoyed reading this piece and it really made me feel it. :) Great word choice and 100% poetic. tc

Fsams

OK....itS betteR....

luzaN