Comments : My Beautiful Sunshine

  • 16 years ago

    by Ray Blue

    Nicely penned.
    Like this part:

    You're the reason I wake day after day, without you in my life I'd probably just die.

    I hope you realize just how special you truly are to me,

    I pray to the heavens above every day,that together we will be.

    You are the most beautiful girl I've ever known,

    When I think of your beauty my mind is always in a zone.

    So when you lie your head down to sleep,

    Remember my dear you always have my heart to keep.

    It's so perfectly express.

    Just only mispelling on:

    I dream of your smile , I long four your kiss,

    Everything is great. 5/5!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by PoEtiCmYme

    What a truly beautiful piece you have penned it ritely worden and meaning ful . Your talented ur work amazes me. Your words one can get lost in. The picture you paint for the minds eye is wonderful. Taking the reader to another place. dammm dis poem is all dat.