Really good
just check your syllables

Great poem, filled with such beauty and a lot of emotions. I like this form, you did an amazing job with it.
Whole poem is truly touching, I especially liked the ending, it is very effective.
Keep up!

Amazing! The structure was again as you described and fitted perfectly. The rhyming and choosing of words were amazing. A definite 5/5

This is very lovely. I've never heard o tho form of poetry, but I think it's really cool. Your work inspires.