I agree that the last line was confussing but other then that really different really good really liked it!

I think this was a great continue to part one, and im hoping for a 3rd part soon.
you have wrote this greatly and i really like your style. keep it up dear.
a 5/5 from me as you really deserve it.

I don't think the last line is confusing, i just think people don't have enough poetic experience to figure it out. I love this one, it flowed excellently and I loved the last stanza.

"So then I started to look at everything
and what it could have been
what he had come to face with
and all the things he seen."

You should change "he" into "he's" or "seen" into "saw".

-Steph

This one was ok compared to the first one

but if i had only read this one and not
the other

i still would have given this one

a

5/5

I just loved the last two lines of the poem. It is the perfect life lesson. Learn from others mistakes. Well done *5/5*

I like this poem too many,great story you told
short but amazing poem good work!!!