Nice and Simple. You may want to check your last line. Over the topic was clear and of course there was a certain message, perhaps you can make that more clear by adding indirect details. As for you poem "Killing me Slowly" give me the path to it so I can read it. great job, keep it up

Excellent piece with a superb flow. wow 5/5 thanx 4 ur comments I will revise those poems tc

Nice. the word choice in this was good.

and did you mean finally over for the title?

Well written, I really loved this one the flow was great, word choice was excellent, and emtion was strong. you did an excellent job here. I have to say that this is probaly one of the best poem I have ever read of yours. Keep upp the amazing work. 5/5

Very good poem. I really liked the flow. It was well written. 5/5

~Chelsea~

This is good, but i feel like you couldve painted more of a picture with this poem, but i still like wat you are saying in this poem, you have a powerful message being sent out and i hope people can understand that! 4/5

Excellent write...really beautiful...the choice of words was good...It conveys a good message through..Good job!
5/5
xxPoojaxx

Gone to far = gone too far

did do get what you wanted? = did YOU get what you wanted?

I liked this poem, and I finally figured out that you have to read the poem straight throughout and not look for a rhyme and there is the flow! I'll go back and read your other poem with this newfound knowledge. I enjoyed your use of words, and despite my last comment on the last poem I read of yours, I do not think this poem is at all cliche. I liked your talk about drugs, and I have known many people who have had the same problems.

I find that you could have gone farther into more detail... the poem seemed to just skim over the overall "deal" with drugs... You merely touched the surface. I suggest you do some kind of sequel that goes more in depth.

Well written,
5/5
~Stephen White

The way you spelt this in my forum...
It was "Finely Over"
I was like.. hmm.
Either Fire's being creative or she spelled it wrong.
When you changed it, I just laughed.

Your first stanza?
Although it doesn't look like it.
I thought it was..
Perfecto.

I love your format in this one.
Easy and smooth.

I don't like the use of good and bad.
Because in my eyes, there is no good and bad.
There is only thoughtful decisions and non thoughtful ones.

The drugs?
A wonderful twist, m'dear.

Your last stanza?
I just didn't like that he died.
Wanted him to live,
I wanted to see his everyday life.
Not the day where he dies.

Although it was close to perfect.
I really didn't like your ending.
4, my dear.

Great poem. touchy subject matter but very truthful. simple, but not understated. good job!

Ooook!

I like it! Spicy!

I love the first stanza; it was certainly the strongest. It said a lot, it was creative, so on and so forth.

I didn't much care for the middle because the first staza was so good, but I LOVED the ending. It was absoultely perfect.
yeah.
perfect. =]

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5