Oh, this was a wonderful poem which is written so greatly. i really enjoyed this poem and a do agree with the message, i specially liked many complex words used to make this poem more beautiful. keep it up. you are so talented.

I always love reading your work; it's always brilliant. A very descriptive piece, with lots of imagery created. Wonderful vocab usage, too. :]

It's very powerful. The vocabulary helps with that. Great work.

Beautiful poem...perfect choice of words...n grear vocab!!.n u've created perfectly clear imagery..n u got the tmessage straight across..
lol....flowed so much like water=)

5/5!!

xxPoojaxx

The poem contained such vivid images.

Great wording.

5/5.

Well... I wouldn't say it's great poem... to me it's a good poem... u've used the wrods well... but i feel somehow the flow is missing.

Sweet poem keep it up and i agree i think the flow is mising be im not trying to be mean or any thing

Oh wow, hunny. This is amazing. It flowed really well & nothing at all seemed forced. It was so deep, dark, & sad. I could just feel the hurt of this girl. You're wording was amazing..

Great job, m'dear.

<3

That made my heart beat faster to be honest lol. Really good. Sad too. Nice job overall XD.

"Washing away the ruby red of secret pain from her body,
Shallow pools of water reveal her blood stained reflection"

You've written a solid piece with an intriguing flow, filled with profound imagery, emotive & atmospheric language. This is one of the best I've read all day, and I'm glad I did :). Very well done.

I am speechless,really and truly blow away, I loved the flow, it was intriging, and the emtion was deep and powerful, the imagery was vivid and painted clear images in my mind, I loved the message, although I am not sure i intrupted it correctly, but at least I am honest, could you perhaps pm the meaning of the poem that you intended so I can see if it is like i thought. I don't want to sayand be wrong lol 5/5

Wow, amazing poem. the flow was great and i loved your word choice. great writer! 5/5

~Chelsea~

Eck.
Blood stain?

Honestly?
When I read the first and second stanza.
I was like... bull.
How can Jessica right something as cliched as this?
But when I read the last stanza...
BAM!
I thought of something new.
The girl possesed?
Maybe the girl was taken over.
She got part of her brain back
And was trying to get the possesor
Out of her body by pain.
If it wasn't like that...
Then I've got a heck of an imagination.
Lol.
But still,
Your first two stanzas WERE kind of cliched...

This is excellent. i like it alot, awesome job! =]

Great poem and vocab.. The only thing I found wrong with it was the first line in the last stanza...it should be "overpowering cravings take over once again" great job though..it created very vivid images..5/5
Tyanna

Wow. the emotion in this poem is so intense and strong... it really brings this poem to life, you can really see it in your mind while reading the images are so vivid.
good job
5/5
gabriella

Very nicely done!! I loved your choice of wording! It was great! And the emotions in this poem were really deep. I just loved it. Awesome job! Keep it up!

Natalie``

Another good piece of poetry from your side
keep it on
5/5

Wow, that is a very interesting poem. i like it!

Yes. its official. your vocab is EXCELLENT.
Geo
xoxox