Ahh i loved that!
i loved the rhyme and the story.
good work!
:o)

Wow. I absolutely loved this. It's beautiful in every aspect. The vocabulary, the imagery, everything.

5/5.

Hanging in the air, = hung in the air

deejay = D.J. (No one says "deejay" any more =])

I found my attention span disappated after the first few verses. I don't really know why, lol... maybe it's because I've been doing so many comments and so many poems, it's been getting tiring, but I will try not to let that affect the comment. As I went on, I noticed how beautiful the flower was beside the computer ... lol, just kidding, no the poem was truly wonderful, I suggest cutting down on the preface-like introduction and get to the action moreso before the beginning, but that is, of course, up to you... I know I have made the same error too, and I can be pretty stubborn as well so I would understand if you disagreed with me. Also, I was impressed with the flow and the rhyme scheme. It looked as if you put a lot of care into this poem, and it shows. You did really well with the punctuation, and your syllabication is off in some places, but is otherwise beautiful. Wonderful job on this poem.

5/5
~Stephen White

The rhyming of this poem was excellent. I was really impressed. I like how the poem went through different years, as if telling a full story, from start to finish.

"Everyone danced, without a having a care." = '...without having a care.' Edit out that extra 'a'.

Wonderful job. :]

I liked what was told in this poem, obviously.

Congrats on winning. =]

Aweee that's so sweet!
I was like "Crap, this is about sex." But it wasn't! Imagnie my relief!

This was unique and well written; I really enjoyed it and I enjoyed the fresh new taste of a story told differently.
It was a cute story, as well. Nicely, nicely done.
Thank you so much (for being your own). =]

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5