Comments : Unconditional Love Despite the Imperfections

  • 17 years ago

    by White Chocolate Dynamite

    Very nice, I am sad to hear about your mother-in-law. My prayers be with you all.

  • 17 years ago

    by Chloe

    This is very deep. I liked it a lot. i lost my best friend a while back, and it is hard.
    I'm sorry that happened to you and your husband.. i wish the best foryou.

  • 17 years ago

    by Tracy D Rollings

    Very sad and heartfelt poem ,very well done , great job , lots of lost love and deep feelings felt there, keep writing and I'll keep reading , your friend Tracy~5~

  • 17 years ago

    by Ash

    Very nicely done. Also very sad..it hurts losing someone... but you put this together greatly.

  • 17 years ago

    by George

    That was so touching...moved me to tears...really makes you think...

  • 17 years ago

    by BreeAnna

    I really liked it good job

  • 17 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    Hmm my dear.. it was very sweet for me,,though i feel the sadness but very adorable work. perfect emotions and very worded words 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    Very sweet..may your mother-in-law be at peace.
    About the write...touching sad,and sweet..it's great tht u've written ths for your husband...shows how much u care n understand his feelings..Good job...
    5/5!
    xxPoojaxx

  • 17 years ago

    by ~*SugarCube*~

    Amazing poem. it was very well written. alot of emotion. well done. 5/5

    ~Chelsea~

  • 17 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    Wow you really expressed a lot in this poem. I find it very sweet too. Uhm flow was a little bit off at some lines but overall it was amazing. 5/5! for this fantastic work!

  • 17 years ago

    by firexdancer

    Okay, this is beautiful. it feels so strong and deep, yet it is fragile as well with it's sadness.
    (i don't know if that makes sense) it is the perfect thing to read at his funeral. no mother, dead or alive would not want to hear this about themselves. i wish i could write that well. 5/5
    gabriella

  • 17 years ago

    by ASPHYXIATED

    Awww.

    This was a great write, the fact you wrote it for someone you loved about some they loved dearly makes it personal and special.
    That alone makes it a good poem.

    But about the actual poem;

    I loved you choice of words in some stanzaz.
    Some were a little land but worked out fine.
    It didn't seem forced, except maybe once or twice but then it flowed perfect.

    Good job. =]

  • 17 years ago

    by Startle Me

    I'm sorry that this happened.
    But... I'm going to use the word that I've used before.
    Hopefully this was only a story and not in real life.
    The words that you chose made it seem a bit... cliched.
    Sorry.

    I don't know.
    Maybe I just have a problem with the word
    Tears.
    It's been used waaaaaay too much.
    All in all, pretty sad "story"
    Notice how I quoted story?
    Lol.
    4/5?
    Darn... you've got a perfect score.
    Might as well not vote :P

  • 17 years ago

    by Teria

    'My mother, now in a better place' < would sound better as 'with my mother in a better place.'

    'think it though' < through.

    'When I was quick to let my anger go
    Mother, I will miss you so' < second line is too short. ;/

    I'm sorry for your husband's loss. And, I surely hope you don't take the above personal, I thought about taking it out. But, it's what these comments are for, eh.
    You did a wonderful job portraying the meaning, and it really made me want to cry.
    The meaning to this, was outstanding. Especially in the end.

    Keep up the amazing work.
    Once again, sorry for your loss.
    I wish you both luck getting through it.

  • 17 years ago

    by xPerfect Chaosx

    Wow.. I am sorry for your loss. This poem is heartwrenching yet extremely beautiful. The emotions in this poem are so strong and wonderful, yet very very sad. It speaks of a love only parents and children can have, that special kind of love. I hope all goes well for. The rhyming in this poem is wonderful and doesn't hinder the flow at all. Superb job!!! 5/5 for sure

    Much Love,
    .:Danielle:.

  • 17 years ago

    by kelsi

    You are such an amazing poet

    keep it up it is amazing :]

  • 17 years ago

    by kelsi

    You are such an amazing poet

    keep it up it is amazing :]

  • 17 years ago

    by LithiumSacrifice

    5/5 its an excellent poem. beautiful. even if i didnt know what it was for, the poem was very touching and as sad as the loss is, happy that the good things are still cherished.

    This poem is amazing.. your words and flow was flawless. Excellent work.

    -Lith

  • 17 years ago

    by Live WeLL

    Wow.. i love the title.. its a beautiful title and beautifully written poem.. very powerful and soo much emotion... i wouldve never guessed that you didn't experience this yourself to be able to write such a powerful poem.. very nice 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    Aw, wow, this nearly had me crying. Such a beautiful piece. I think it will be greatly appreciated at the funeral.

    All the best, and take care.