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Really good one, it reminded me on diary entry.
5/5

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I've decided i love you. :D and this new poem.

Very thought provoking.

Very thought provoking.

I've been waiting for something new from you, and this was well worth the wait! amazing! :]

So maybe I'll keep these walls from shaking,
and all the colours will stop me from shading,
every positive thought to grey,

My favorite part.
Only thing I see wrong with this is the lack of capitalization, But still a lovely poem. Well done.

Happy writing,
Hannah-

Hmm...
The emotions were the same as the last poem I read.
But I realized something while reading this.
You use the same format over and over.
Maybe you could change it up?

I don't mean that it's getting boring.
Your format is your format.
But sometimes, too much words put in together
Is just hard to read.
You need spaces.
I don't know.
I think you need to find stanzas for each one.
Maybe I'm just being prejudice.
All in all, still the same.
You're a raw poet, m'dear.
I hope to read more from you :]

It was interesting and so pity...And flow was a little hard sometimes..
But this ones really got me;

so maybe I'll keep these walls from shaking,
and all the colours will stop me from shading,

Well done,
Laura