This one is one of my favs good job

ashleigh

Very dark great poem I loved it

Like it lots.. awesum description.

Very beautiful dark poem...perfectly penned acrostic...great job...excellent description...good word choice too
Kp writing!

xxPoojaxx

Great acrostic, excellent words choice. 5/5

"Ever lasting darkness" (sic) (= Everlasting is one word only.)

The words bleed, eyes, attempts, darkness, and torture and so-ons and so-ons... gave me visual of pain and despair. Bleeding eyes, I suppose, is undoubtedly a metaphor which depicts of a "sightless" person mourning and becoming extinct soon.

Pensively sad and gloomy... Nice shot for an Acrostic! xD

-Debbie Cakes

Wow...that is a very good poem.You are very good at choosing your words.I love it!!..dark and myserist(cant spell.lol)..great job!

This is a very good poem keenan, i think you would be great at rhyming but this is perfect the way it is, i give it a 5/5!!! keep them coming!!!

Hey this one Rocks.... I love it

Wow!!! Unique and really powerful poem, it has amazing atmosphere and you expressed emotions with just a few words.
Well done! Excellent job on this one, it deserves 5/5