Falling is so beautiful
forever into dark
spread your wings and soar
on the world you've made your mark
^^I like this stanza...great!..though not my favourite..it's got something special which stands out..lol
I like the poem..the topic u've written on n small messages u've conveyed behind the words..
Great job!
5/5
xxPoojaxx

Thats amazing.

Oh wow Gabs that was awesome!!! great write hun!!! wow, you captured every moment so delicately!! I love it hun!!

This my dear is BEAUTIFUL!
I loved the opening, very powerful with it just getting better and better from there.
The ending again was beautifully done, very hardhitting and intense.
beautiful work.

Wow, I really liked this piece. I like it mainly because it is unique, and different. typically I run across poems that are all the same to me. I like how you used your description and imagery to show you a vision through the eyes of the unfamiliar. There was a word that needs to be corrected though that you must have over looked.
"strong enough to try now
all are born with flight
jumping off the edge
hope to be allright"

Allright, is supposed to be alright.

My favorite stanza would have to be

"falling is so beautiful
forever into dark
spread your wings and soar
on the world you've made your mark"

I like how you phrazed that last line. And the ending was fantastic. Keep it up. By the way thank you so much for the comment on my poem "Dreams and reality". I'm so sorry for getting back to you so late. I have been at the hospital for my arm. I got into a Go-kart accident a month ago and tore a muscle, so I

Cramped inside an orb of dew
I don't like the word cramped.
It makes me picture PMS.

blind eyes seeing all the universe.
Pretty redundant.

at least you are alive
That line doesn't camouflage well with the rest of your stanza.

falling is so beautiful
forever into dark
spread your wings and soar
on the world you've made your mark
Completely random.

I didn't really like your poem that much.

The flow was off.
The topic wasn't great.
The rhyming was forced.
It didn't really stand out to me.

4/5.

I like the theme. It was actually one of the <better> nature poems that I've read ON this site. Perceiving the world through the eyes of a raven is quite intriguing, though I'd like to know more about its own perception. On the whole, this piece is of great promise to be enhanced in the future.

Nice work, nonetheless. A good read. =]

Strong enough to try now
all are born with flight
jumping off the edge
hope to be alright

falling is so beautiful
forever into dark
spread your wings and soar
on the world you've made your mark
^This two stanzas are incredibly written, I love it! It has great flow and you created powerful rhythm. Good topic, it is positive. And the third stanza is excellent, it really deserves 5/5

"wings to wet to open"
^^ too wet to. . .

Okay, darling. . . I mean wow. Lmfao. You're an amazing poet.
No lie, it's amazing.

All of your poems have this flow to them, and this like flawless feel.

It's amazing.

Ahh amazingly beautiful. keep writing, and ill keep reading! 5/5!

Oh I just loved the imagery in this .. it was flawless. You described each detail with such thought and beauty that was left speechless at the end. It was short sweet and got your point across with a wonderful choice of vocabulary. Well done *5/5*