Same critics than the other poem i still smth.. but here the story and the details are better so 4/5. i like: the part where u can't stand looking at urself cuz u cant stand knowing
that u lost him. also the part with the door that he shut n u keep knocking but he won't open it. and the last verse: "truth is i miss you baby ".

Geez gurl
so much love and hurts. this is deep.

my fav stanza is

now you are with her and
your smile is because of her
but i cant help but thinking
of when it was me who made
you smile that way

this got to me alot.
it makes u wonder if he thinks love is just a game and all the gurls r the pawns ya know...jus like the board game sorry...

LOVE IT!! You have talent!