The first part of this poem was done quite well it drew thereader in but then I don't know what happen you just lost me in a bunch of nonsense, either you were trying to make a point and then switched in the middle or you just lost track of the peice all together. I alaude your idea in theis poem but I would do some revision and ask yourself what would you like to tell the reader in this peice. Plot121

Hahahah this is so funny. I keep laughing after reading this.

A shorT buT beautifuL piecE 5/5 brilliantlY penneD. keeP writinG!

Wow it was so eliminated by all the things and hmm..I guess I should see this movie soon
You did the ad so well I think ;)

Good work,
Laura

Lol that was cool-
that would be kind of weird if someone called themselves hello...
maybe I should write more funny poems...

-shattered

Funny...and one of a kind..!

4.5 was confusing for a bit but very funny. ^_^

Nice job it was really cute keep it up

Ur an awesome poet..loved this poem just brilliant:d
keep up the gr8 writes
tk care
bree x

Just a beautiful poem you had written....

Nazeer with you...

Fsams, I never know what too expect with your poem's.
Some make me cry, some make me think, some make me smile, and other's make me Laugh.

I couldn't stop laughing when I read this peice, I loved it:)
Well done,
5/5 Elaine.

YouR stylE oF writinG iS aN enjoyablE topiC. aN excellenT piecE oF worK thaT attracteD mY sinceritY verY mucH...

thiS iS luzaN froM NZ

This is funny, in a good way I mean.

I like the poem it is ok.
Maybe just to short but ok.

I liked it , but most people i think dont get it, 5/5 good job, and way to keep me thinking, i guess

HAHAHA, this made me giggle.

Alot of the time, humourous poems can be quite difficult to write, but you have mastered it beautifully here.

While relatively short you managed to put in so much emotion and depth, and the imagery was wonderful.

Excellent work on this!

Wow who knew someone could lose ALL there identification AND get amnesia!!! this is truely funny, and very well written. I have to find that movie a definatly want to see it now.