I feel that you need to add a few more words to each line, it would help the flow and effect the reader experiences.
5/5 tho, well done. David
13 years ago
Wow, so emotional and deep. i loved it, did it really happen? the poem was great but it still didn't really sound complete to me. just not enough detail in the words, sort of thing. but over all. it was great that was just my view. but 5/5
Harsh and raw wmotions portrayed with anger I loved it and thing you made this poem really deep. Im sure so many ppl can relate to this. the flow was spot on you really get the flow in your poetry flowing smooth without any bumps in the way. Well done on writing a poem like this enjoyable. ~mel