Wow... this is an amazing poem... i can understand it so well... good on you keep up the good work.. mabye you could give me a few tips im new at all this...

Wow. An amazing poem. It has such a great story line to it, not anything like what i've read before. I got a bit confused at the end, I thought she was dead, but oh well, that's just my misunderstanding. The only problem I could see was in the first stanza, as well as the one that it is repeated in, it says;
'Not knowing how more more he can possible take'
I think that one of the more's is supposed to be another word, and possible should be possibly. Only a minor typing error.
An excellent poem. It kept me interested the whole way. Lovely job. 5/5

Tammie

Wow.
I don't think I have ever read a poem that long and actually enjoyed it.After each stanza I wanted more.

You told a story, which you played out so well.
You described everything as in the parts where she was sneaking, You word use actually made me whisper.

Amazing work.
I usually don't like explicit poetry.
But this made it an actual poem.
Instead of a porn scene.

Well done =]

I have only one word for this:

Amazing!

xx

Amazing poem. It had great imagre. I loved the word choice and the flow of this one. It was kind of long but you made it work. I gace it a 5/5.

I think you did a good job rhyming and keeping the poem flowing well. One grammatical error that repeated..

Not knowing how more more he can possible take

Probably should be 'much' more rather than 'more' more. Hopefully that helped and it'll keep the flow going cause I know I stop whenever I don't understand a line

Anyway good job and 5/5 on that one

You put in plenty of passion here! It's absolutely perfect! 5/5

I loved this poem! I loved the story feeling of it. 5/5

<UnToLd TrUtH>

You're right.
It is pretty darned long.

Umm..
I have to admit.
This was quite... enticing.
Lol.
I wouldn't say I loved it.
But I did like it.
It was really forward, m'dear.
I don't know if I liked that.
I'm usually into poems that are subtle.
But still.
I liked your format, style, and descriptor.
5/5?

Wow

Okay...I frikken LOVE this!
By the time I had finished reading, I was completely blown away...
Such a powerful opening, with each line getting better and better, imagery portrayed was beautifully done, it created very vivid pictures, flow was flawless throughout and the word choice and rhyme scheme are enjoyable, as is the whole poem.
The repetition used works nicely, it drove home the point really well, and the ending is stunning, powerful and intense.
The only mistake I could spot was that you used 'more' twice in the first stanza, when I think you meant 'much more he can possibly take.'
Apart from that however, you truly did a wonderful job with this.

Wow. the vocab and the imagery was amzing in this poem, but i think you added few too many details in certain areas, but i think you did a wonderful job. thanks for the comment!

Wow
good poem
when I first looked at it I was like i aint reading all of this. Then I started to read and the story make me read attentively
good job
5/5

Wow what a beautiful poem. The story is flowing so well that though it was long i didnt find it long to read. Its very nice with superb rhymes.

Wow!!!! that was an awsome poem

So what's going on with the ending?

THIS POEM HAS ALOT OF MEANING TO IT...U CAN DEFINETLY WRTE A BOOK!
5/5

WOW, that was amazing, long but amazing
it makes alot of sense, keep up the good
work :)

It was a bit long, but I felt all of it was fairly relevant. I was just a bit confused at the end, when you said she was already dead yet was having sex with the man. Is she dead or not? Other than that, I like the moral of the poem, and it had a good flow and rhyme scheme to it.

Wow, what an intense piece of work that flowed wonderfully to allow the reader enticed to read more. Excellent work, may your heart always be filled with peace and joy each and everyday.

sadaddy